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The topic of the essay: Ernest Hemingway’s “Hills Like White Elephants” https://www.gvsd.org/cms/lib/PA01001045/Centricity/Domain/765/HillsPDFText.pdf
The length of the essay should be 3-5 pages, not including the Works Cited page. NO PLAGIARISM.  We often speak of tone, setting, plot, theme, characterization, and point of view as separate aspects of a story in order to break down a complex narrative into more manageable parts. But this analytic process of identifying various elements is something we have done to the story: the story (if it is a good one) is an integrated whole. The more closely we examine the separate elements, the clearer it becomes that each is integrally related to the other. 
Your essay must be submitted in MLA style, including a properly formatted Works Cited page.

Introduction

1. Is there an original title?

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2. Does the title make sense as it relates to the essay?

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3. If not, what do you think the title is missing?

4. Is the introduction 5-8 sentences?

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5. Does the introduction have an attention getter?

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6. What is the attention getter? (detailed description, a story, a fact or statistic, a definition, an interesting comparison, an example, a quote)? Highlight or otherwise indicate one.

7. Is there a clear thesis?

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8. What is the thesis statement? Highlight the thesis in the draft.

9. Is it the last sentence of the intro?

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10. From reading the thesis, can you see what the paper will discuss?

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Body Paragraphs (3 body paragraphs)

11. Does every paragraph support the thesis statement? If not, indicate so in the draft.

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12. Does each body paragraph have a clear topic sentence? Highlight the topic sentences in the draft.

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13. Does each paragraph contain one, and only one, topic?

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14. If not, which paragraph(s) contain more than one topic?

15. Do these topics relate to the thesis statement?

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16. Do the body paragraphs meaningfully support the thesis? Please note revisions or questions within the essay.

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16. Does each body paragraph contain 6-9 sentences?

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17. If not, which body paragraphs are too short and/or too long?

18. Do the body paragraphs contain support from the writer’s experiences and outside sources?

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19. If not, which paragraphs should be expanded or offer more or better proof? Where can the author add more depth and interest?

20. Should any paragraphs be combined, deleted, or moved? If so, which ones and why. Indicate this in the draft.

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21. Are there transitions between ideas and paragraphs?

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22. Are the transitions appropriate for the connection of ideas presented in essay?

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Conclusion

24. Does the conclusion give the reader a sense of closure?

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25. Does the conclusion have 5-8 sentences?

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26. Does the conclusion restate the thesis?

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27. Does the conclusion summarize the main points of the paper?

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28. Does the conclusion include an afterthought to keep reader’s attention?

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Paper as a whole

31. Is the paper’s single focus clearly established throughout?

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32. Is there a clear beginning, middle, and end?

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33. If not, what needs clarification?

34. Based on this essay, does the student illustrate (offer examples) to prove the thesis? If not, what should be revised to make the understanding clearer? Indicate in the draft.

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Have you made notes throughout the paper for the author? Your comments should indicate areas that he/she has addressed well, as well as areas that need to be revisited. At the end of the author’s paper write two to three complete sentences where you offer praise. Do not say “good” or “very.” If you are not able to think of a better adjective, go online or to an old-fashioned thesaurus and look for a synonym. In your sentences, point to a specific argument that you found to be well written, argued, and/or supported.